THOUGHTS ABOUT WRITING AN EXCITING HYPERTEXT Mark Bernstein Eastgate Systems, Inc. 134 Main Street Watertown MA 02472 USA +1 (617) 924-0044 bernstein@eastgate.com ABSTRACT and the once-royal women of the doomed city wait to which Decline And Fall is a Storyspace-style hypertext novel, a school victor each will be enslaved2. Euripides wrote The Trojan Women story based loosely on The Trojan Women. Its goal was not to be in 415 BCE. Nearly five hundred years later, Seneca revisited the good, but rather to be exciting – to make an argument that subject in his Troades of 54CE, drawing as well on Euripides hypertext can be coherent, consistent, and possibly fun. These are Hecuba, written around 424 BCE. All describe the lamentation of some notes of what I learned from the effort. the former royal family of conquered Troy as they face what cannot be faced amid the ruins of their palace. I laugh, when those who at the Spear are bold Keywords And vent'rous, if that fail them, shrink and fear What yet they know must follow, to endure Storyspace, hypertext, hypermedia, literature, fiction, Exile, or ignominy, or bonds, or pain, education, design, implementation, support, history of The sentence of thir Conquerour: computing, maps, links. This is now Our doom. (Paradise Lost II.204-209) 1.“NO MAN BUT A BLOCKHEAD EVER The plays do not conform to modern taste – they have too little WROTE, EXCEPT FOR MONEY.” drama and too many loose ends – though Berlioz’ Les Troyens A number of critics have conjectured that hypertext is inherently and Michael Cacoyannis’s film of The Trojan Women (with lyrical [31] or postmodern [24] [17], that it resists the familiar Katharine Hepburn as Hecuba, Vanessa Redgrave as Andromache, and Geneviève Bujold as Cassandra) are notable. narrative pleasures that attend print [6] [7]. I disagree [3]. My argument would, admittedly, be more convincing if we could The Trojan Women assumes axiomatically that women have no point to a wider range of dramatic and exciting hypertexts. The agency. For Polyxena and Cassandra, this is the dramatic premise: pursuit of the hypertext potboiler is unlikely to generate either Polyxena cannot be saved and Cassandra cannot be believed. literary prestige or great sums of money; its neglect is not That’s who they are. What might happen, though, if those less surprising. afflicted by the gods tried to do something, even if all they can One familiar approach to making hypertext stories exciting is to manage is flight? make them into games, asking the reader to participate as (or on behalf of) one of the characters [26]. Games have proved successful. At times, though, the player’s concerns overshadow the characters, and the position of the story1 in the game has of 2 course been famously controversial. The arguments I have termed Compare Psalm 137: “My Friend, Hamlet,” moreover, cast doubt on whether games By the rivers of Babylon, there we sat down, yea, we wept, when make sense when the story is inflexible: let a sensible person like we remembered Zion. you or me into a tragedy, and everything is likely to collapse. We hanged our harps upon the willows in the midst thereof. In Decline and Fall, I set out to tell an exciting story in a full- For there they that carried us away captive required of us a song; throated hypertext, and to do so without offering any likelihood and they that wasted us required of us mirth, saying, Sing us that the reader’s choices will change how things turn out. The one of the songs of Zion. choices matter –readings may be very different – but Troy always How shall we sing the LORD'S song in a strange land? falls. If I forget thee, O Jerusalem, let my right hand forget her cunning. If I do not remember thee, let my tongue cleave to the roof of my 2.THE TROJAN WOMEN mouth; if I prefer not Jerusalem above my chief joy. Decline and Fall is (very roughly) based on The Trojan Women, Remember, O LORD, the children of Edom in the day of an account of the aftermath of the Trojan War. Troy has fallen, Jerusalem; who said, Rase it, rase it, even to the foundation thereof. 1 O daughter of Babylon, who art to be destroyed; happy shall he Following [4], I use “story” to refer to events that occur in the be, that rewardeth thee as thou hast served us. fictive world, and “plot” to describe how an author arranges those Happy shall he be, that taketh and dasheth thy little ones against events. the stones. 3.THE SCHOOL STORY Senneterre is not here “great battle chief of the fierce For a decade, we’ve been talking about hypertext tragedy and bowmen of the Northern Hardwood Forest,” as we’re not much further along. It’s time to try something else. Professor Courvason chooses to render her courtesy Why not melodrama? title, but Lady Oakton. Melodrama was always a suspect quality for modernism because To us, The Country was simply where we lived. The it was so readily (and frequently) deployed in the service of forest and the desert, the grand old houses, the beggars, bourgeois sentiment and conservative cant. Postmodernism picked and the colonial gallows were simply the world as it up the story again in film; in print, postmodernists grabbed old always had been. stories to break them over their knee. [10]. Two conspicuous We will proceed (in one reading) to a place where we might refuges for plot remain. One is genre fiction, and indeed the expect to end: with our protagonist on the dormitory roof, holding shelves of the App Store are filled with adaptations of detective a rifle, about to be killed by a SWAT team. Still, before we can mysteries, dating romances, adventure romances, hero quests, and climb those ancient gables, we may need to establish the setting or vengeance tales. invoke our muse. Even in exposition, we can create tension by The other sanctuary is Young Adult fiction, a marketing term playing with and against convention. We have a very English which has evolved, in contemporary usage, to denote stories with school but this is not England: to make London serve for Troy is plots3. The School Story lends itself well to The Trojan Women: very hard work [28]. We have denaturalized a setting which the in particular, both are necessarily fixed in place. The School Story following lexia will work hard to renaturalize and problematized necessarily has a large cast, and this naturalizes if it does not solve things which the kids will take for granted. Even prefatory the problem that clearly vexed the ancient playwrights: if there are exposition can create tension, provided it does its work and gets a million tragedies in the naked, ruined city, how do we out of the way. The audience wants to know what’s going to acknowledge their multiplicity? happen [20]. We have read lots of school stories. The form was enormously Once that’s done, of course, we can generate whatever momentum popular in the nineteenth century, when it provided a window for we require by showing a point-of-view character who wants the British working class into a hidden world [27]. If Tom something urgently. Trish Parker would very much like to live a Brown’s School Days is not universally read today, Harry Potter little longer, though she knows she won’t. She shares Polyxena’s is. A setting flexible enough to accommodate Michael Chabon’s predicament: Wonder Boys, Jo Walton’s Among Others, Anita Shreve’s Of course, I have to admit Testimony and Dorothy Sayer’s Gaudy Night might stretch to I'd have liked to live a little longer accommodate the children of Troy. I mean there's a lot I don't know yet. Our point is to generate excitement even though we know Like: why do guys insist on driving? (approximately) what is going to happen. (The first sentence of And how come they call on Friday to ask you out The Hunger Games begins “When I wake up;” we already know for Friday night? how the story will turn out, though there are 1,193 pages to go.) And why do guys hate to get dressed up? The nineteenth century school story ends in graduation, the How come they don't like to talk on the phone? twentieth century school story ends in the dissolution of the Why do guys drink out of the milk carton? school. Decline and Fall has one beginning, and essentially one And how come they like to play air guitar? end; what matters is what happens in between. Why is a guy who sleeps around a stud but a girl who does is a slut? [8] 4.STORYSPACE 3 Decline and Fall is a traditional Storyspace-style hypertext, made A very sharp reader, seeing this, might sense the tension that up of nodes and links. It runs to about 90,000 words, in about 375 Polyxena seems to be appearing out of place, outside the position writing spaces. she holds in the plays. Is this incidental, or purposeful? Is the Storyspace 3 extends Storyspace to include the semantics of identification wrong? These implicit interpretive theories must be sculptural hypertext [23] [5]. As in Storyspace, links may be held in abeyance, and they are likely to remain in suspense until deactivated by guard fields, which are now generalized predicates we encounter Polly Xena, either in the full flush of unwonted on the state of the reading. In addition, writing spaces may prosperity or, in other readings, already green in memory. themselves be guarded by predicates, called requirements, and Other readers (O wicked sons!) won’t see the allusion, or seeing may change the state of the hypertext by performing actions when will not care. They want to know how Trish Parker is going to get visited [21] [22]. Storyspace 3 also offers a simple stretchtext out of this mess, or in any case they want to see what happens to facility. her. They want to know how this happened in a fancy colonial prep school, and what’s going to be done about it. 5. ONCE UPON A TIME We begin with exposition. Most of Decline and Fall is told in third person, present tense, an energetic mode that also helps finesse time shifts. Because I am writing in English, I have replaced our traditional titles and forms of address with their rough 6.AND THEN… equivalents in European tradition. My classmate Linnea Incident is exciting. Desire is exciting. Conflict is exciting. And so is the puzzle of robotic hypertext, a dual reading where we try to understand what’s happening and try also to understand what 3 this machine is doing. Are we reading yet? YA fiction is poorly understood. It’s not chiefly about an absence of sex [14] [29] or violence [9] [13]. Some incidents are inherently energetic. Raymond Chandler’s famously suggested that, when he found himself stuck in a scene, he could always arrange to have someone walk in holding a gun. links are recorded in the trajectory and can take actions that David Mamet suggested that the Hollywood romance is simply change the reading state, moreover, stretchtext can be used, as it is the progressive unveiling of the heroine, and that’s reliable, too in Twine, to offer readers a sense of choice [12]. [19]. In part because I’ve been arguing that recurrence is not an error Even in repose, dialog is exciting [18]. Interrogations are for so many years [1], Decline and Fall largely forgoes strict especially exciting [16]. What has not been made sufficiently recurrence and avoids conspicuous cycles. There remains a good clear is that dialog offers interesting opportunities for deal of implicit recurrence, both through reference to what hypertextuality, and interrogation really lets hypertext take over. happened in the story-past and in foreshadowing what will happen So, too, does dialogue where the parties are speaking at cross- in the story-future. Because the account is not chronological, both purposes, especially when incredulity is in the air. Cassandra, who history and prophecy often serve to recall and recapitulate (and sees the future but whom no one will believe, was born for sometimes to reinterpret) what a reader has already seen. (The hypertext. ancients knew what they were doing when they invented Foreshadowing is interesting. Allusion is interesting as well. I Cassandra, a prophet who nobody believes and who can therefore have emphasized here the challenge of excitement, of propelling say whatever needs saying without the least risk to continuity. the reader across the chasm that separates one writing space from the next, but we also need to distract and relieve the reader, 8.UNIT TESTING A STORY Decline and Fall isn’t a large novel, but it’s fairly large as a giving them something to look at (or think about) beyond the hypertext fiction. Even with one starting point, on ending, and a horrors of war. We may be beset by ignorant armies, but once in a preference to avoid cycles, the network and underlying state while we need to remember that comfortable old land of dreams – machine is complex. What mechanical assistance can the system so various, so beautiful, so new. lend an author wrestling with the network? 7.BUT THERE WAS ONE THING THEY First, it’s fairly easy to identify a number of common blunders. HAD FORGOTTEN Tinderbox agents [2] can identify passages that lack inbound links The reader brings to a school story the memory of other school (and so are unreachable) and those with no outbound links (and so stories they have read, or heard about, or have seen adapted for end the reading). The syntax for changing the game state film or television. Tom Brown plays rugby, Nicola Marlow plays $Tags(/me)=$Tags(/me)+”otters” stickball, Harry Potter plays Quidditch, Ender plays The Game. is easily confused with the syntax for modifying a note after it has The school story doesn’t require a scene on the playing fields, but been visited. when we find ourselves there, we know where we are. $Tags=$Tags+”otters” Even outside genre convention, conventional episodes communicate where we appear in the story arc while presenting Again, a simple syntax scan can identify suspicious actions. an opportunity to play with the reader’s expectation. When our More interesting, we can use Markov processes to model reader hero changes clothes, we know they are also shifting identities trajectories through the hypertext. This proved surprisingly useful and commencing a new approach to dealing with the world. When for tracking down errors that led, for example, to unwanted dead our kids have built a small zone of comfort and refuge in the ends. This remains far below the sophistication that Stotts and wilderness – whether smoking pipeweed in the ruins of Isengard, Furuta implemented back in 1989, but it’s not been attempted in building shelters with Ralph and Piggy in the Pacific, or many writing tools since [30] . improvising running water in the jungle of The Naked And The Dead, we know that this pastoral pleasure will end, and soon we 9.ACKNOWLEDGMENTS will again be on the run, our heroes isolated, and we are all the I am grateful to Mark Anderson, Bill Bly, Em Short, Bruno Dias, eleven o’clock speech. and Paul Czege for discussions on topics touched on here. John Timeshift provides an ample source of episodic hypertextuality. Clute explained the hero’s change of clothing and lent me an We can begin with Trish and her rifle on the roof, the moment ending, several years before I began the story. when everything goes to hell. 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